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Alison-nyan! by rainbownote Alison-nyan! by rainbownote
Since ~Rawrnia8D wanted me to upload the unfinished version, here's my first OC - Alison! EDITED: Finished the background! I hope you like her >w< If there are any changes you'd like to suggest, go ahead ^.^

So I guess this is still a WIP thing, but I think I've improved with digital art. I'm getting to know SAI a bit more, this is my third drawing I think?

Anyway, as usual, criticism comments and faves are very welcome! Thank you very much~
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This is a great picture for your use of shading on the character, however your anatomy and detail could use some work.
The cats look pretty good in their anatomy, however their coats are a little bland...they could have used more detail and shading.
Your hair on your character is really great, it's very hard to make the colours flow together well and get that 'anime hair' look, which I feel you have achieved.
The thing that draws me away from this picture though is the way you shaded the tree leaves and grass...the texture, shade, and hues it the circles create throw me off. I look at them and think, "That looks more like a green cloud than a tree." I think drawing some of the individual branches and some of the texture on the bark and leaves would have helped the visual impact of this picture.
In the background, you do the same kind of shading with the circles and I myself encourage you to go beyond that because you have advanced shading skills that you demonstrated on the character. I like your clouds a lot though, they look very realistic.
Over all, this piece is good, but I can wait to see what you can do with more practice.
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Wow!!! What a massive improvement Raine!!! You've done really well with the composition in this artwork with the flying leaves, and also a great use of saturated colour, I especially like the colour of the jeans!!! Your hair and eye shading skills have improved so much and her expression is soo moe >w< A good attempt at drawing cats!

Improvements:
-Your clothes fold drawing skills could be improved by doing some real life study of folds. Most of her body looks flat, besides from the chest, which you've shaded well. But the folds on her jeans, shirt and especially boots look very unnatural. Her feet size is also a bit short... The cats have a good pose, but they seem flat due to the minimal shading done on their bodies.
-You've done a good attempt at drawing backgrounds, but the round shapes that you've used to shade both the sky and the ground and the tree is very distracting and unrealistic. The round circles that you've applied on the edge of the grass to the sky look like they've been cut off, which is probably due to a clipping mask, beware that your shapes don't look too flat because of the clipping and make another layer to add more texture to the scenery. The same idea is with the clouds and tree, study some real scenery and work from there :)

Overall:
The vision is very good, giving a calming feeling of spring. The techniques used to shade could be improved but overall, a cute and calming artwork! Great improvement!!! *sorry for such a long critique.......xD you should know me by now...*
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shea-dp Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
cool
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rainbownote Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks ^^
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shea-dp Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
np ^^
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FruitTartz Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Woah looks amazing~ I really love the way you drew the backgrounds *A* Looks really awesome :3 Great job and keep it up!
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rainbownote Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'll do my best >w<
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AlanTheRobot Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
There seem to be some overall problems with anatomy. The poses are a bit too stiff. The clothes wrinkles are also odd and the shading is a bit off. Sometimes you shade and sometimes you don't so things like the eyes and the boots look flat.

I see you're blending with a hard round brush, that's good, but you should vary the size and do more strokes and overall blend more, create more form and depth.

Your faces are also very similar. Too similar. You don't vary the expressions much. They're all smiling or open mouthed. And I don't understand why she would be blushing.
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rainbownote Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Firstly, thank you for taking time out to give me an honest critique. Yep, there are flaws with the anatomy, I'm working on it. I'll try more in-depth shading and using more highlights so that things won't look flat in future, thanks for pointing it out!

I've never thought about varying the size of the brush too much before, so I'll definitely try it. Thanks for the tip!

There's definitely same face syndrome going on here, I'm working on changing the expressions around a bit and working on different poses as well. Ah.. I'm not sure why either. Thanks again for the critique, I'll keep it in mind.
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CHOCOCHIYOKO Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Ok so overall this picture is pretty nice. The proportions are pretty good but she seems pretty flat: girls are normally a bit curvier. Also those cats are reallllly small. The girl doesn't look very balanced, it helps to have the feet underneath the head. Take a look at the balance section here : [link] Also people generally dont stand so straight (like here the hips and shoulders are aligned but try making them go opposite directions [link] see here (although this isn't very well done its old haha)) The colors are also really saturated, you should try toning it down a bit. The bow is also a bit awkward on the top of her head...You could maybe do a bit more research on trees :3
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rainbownote Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Firstly, thank you so much for the links! It's very helpful- I've read through the entire page and I think I understand a lot more now. I can now see that she does look sort of unbalanced. I'll make my girls a bit curvier from now on. Your example is also pretty good, thank you!

I will tone down the colours in future and maybe remove the bow. Definitely going to do more tree practice XD Thank you once again for taking time out to critique my work!
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CHOCOCHIYOKO Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student General Artist
sure :)
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